Sunday, July 12, 2009

4 Year Old Sophists

Ear to ground,
hear Earth's

Close eyes 
to negate being.

Throw yourself down
in a tantrum,
an Ethics.

Volition proves the truth 
of every diversion.

1 comment:

Beysshoes said...

On tenses:

Closing eyes
erase your

The last two stanza's jiggy the format ... and breaks the spell you create in the beginning.

You know, David, the first two stanzas move so beautifully and lightly. I feel as though it's enough. It's plenty; you might let the reader simply rest and savor the sensation. LL