The last two stanza's jiggy the format ... and breaks the spell you create in the beginning.
You know, David, the first two stanzas move so beautifully and lightly. I feel as though it's enough. It's plenty; you might let the reader simply rest and savor the sensation. LL
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On tenses:
Closing eyes
erase your
being.
The last two stanza's jiggy the format ... and breaks the spell you create in the beginning.
You know, David, the first two stanzas move so beautifully and lightly. I feel as though it's enough. It's plenty; you might let the reader simply rest and savor the sensation. LL
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